个人陈述是大家在申请美国研究生留学的时候需要准备的材料内容之一，海华伦留学顾问介绍说，在准备美国研究生留学个人陈述的时候，应该首先想好开头应该如何入手。下面本文为大家解读了一些关于个人陈述开头写法应该避免的几个点：

　　一、学校介绍型

 

　　I am an undergraduate in…University ， the largest university anda cradle of scientific and technological talents in China.

 

　　点评：该同学的个人陈述开头等于是一个申请学校的简介，这好像是在帮助学校做宣传，或表达你有多了解该学校，而不是写个人陈述了。这是没有意义的开头，白白浪费了字数，最容易被秒据掉。

　　二、重复简历型

 

　　I earned my Bachelor of Science degree in … Sciences with a specialization in … in 2002 at … university

 

　　点评：美国留学个人陈述不要去重复简历中的东西，这在很多学校的PS要求中明确提到，个人陈述的写作要具体到事件上，事件解决上，而不要单纯重复已有的内容。

 

 

　　三、抄袭句式型

 

　　As a student majoring in Computer Science， I began my odyssey since I entered undergraduate program. Indeed， having entered this splendid computer world， I am more than greedy for something new.

 

　　点评：Odyssey 和more than greedy for something new 这种句式不知道是从哪里学到的，很多同学在用。但你要知道，老外最恨抄袭，最喜原创，所以利害关系大家想想吧。

 

　　四、救世主型

 

　　I am a problem solver. I have an impulse as a kind of instincts to solvevarious problems before me and enjoy doing that. Since I was a little boy， a voice from President Franklin Roosevelt has constantly hovered around my mind， "The world can be changed by man's endeavor， …

 

　　点评：一副救世主的形象，小时候就受富兰克林的影响，立志改变世界。个人陈述的写作一定要个人化具体化，别吹大牛，甚至带着一种霸权主义思维。

 

　　五、犹抱琵琶型

 

　　Making a right decision at the right time is very important for a young people .At present， I have come to a critical point in my life when I have to make a decision concerning my future course of action. Only a perceptive understanding of oneself will enable one to chart his proper action. Aftercarefully thinking， reviewing my life and analyzing my personality， I make the determination and choose to apply for graduate study in XXX. And I choose to specialize in communications which I will pursue a lifelong career.

 

　　点评：重点放在自己要做重大决定上了，人生的转折点，然后来上句所谓名言警句。浪费字数，有限的字数里，同学们应该学会直接，并且抓住重点，突出自己最有优势的方面，最有特色的方面。

 

　　六、语言幼稚型

 

　　'Why the gecko can climb on the wall while we can't-' 'Why the leaves turn red in autumn' 'How many stars are there in the sky-' When I was in childhood， I always kept asking my mom all kinds of questions。I am especially interested in how things work， I can even take apart things for several hours in order to find out its principle.

 

　　以上内容就是本文对美国研究生留学个人陈述如何写这一个问题做的介绍，通过本文的介绍大家现在对此应该有了更加清楚的了解和认识了吧。如果你还想了解更多的留学问题，可以拨打010-5869-8802电话进行咨询海华伦留学专。海华伦独家提出“私人订制”的高端工作室服务模式，从学生开始办理申请直到安全抵达提供细节性的解决方案，提供贴心留学服务体验。